英语雅思考试,未来一年或几年职业发展设想精简语句

雅思考试2024-11-13 14:59:22嘉佳老师

  对于雅思写作来说,学会雅思写作的技巧是非常重要的,这样既能够节省时间又容易拿高分。接下来就和出国留学网来看看雅思写作考试如何精简语句?

  词汇精简技巧

  雅思写作精简建议一:避免空洞的单词和词组

  1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关或重要的信息,完全可以删掉。

  比如:When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.

  这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为:

  Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.

  2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换。

  例如:Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.

  “due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子,可以替换,简化为下面的表达方式:

  Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now.

  雅思写作精简建议二:避免重复

  1.尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复,但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。

  例如下面这个例子:The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.

  large对一个farm来说就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改为:

  The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.

  更简洁的表达方式为:

  My grandfather grew up on a large farm.

  2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换。

  例如:My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm.

  这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly,显得更为简洁:

  My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm.

  雅思写作精简建议三:选择最恰当的语法结构

  选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则:

  1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中最重要的意思。

  例如:The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.

  从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:

  My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm.

  2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构。

  例如下面的句子:There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather.

  可以改为:

  My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.

  更简洁的句式为:

  My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.

  3.把从句改为短语或单词。

  例如:Dairy cows were raised on the farm,which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an areathat was remote.

  简介的表达方式为:

  The dairy farm was located in a remotearea, 100 kilometers to the nearest university.

  4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。

  例如:In the fall, not only did the cows haveto be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather'sfamily.

  本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-mygrandfather's family”,而使用了被动语态後,彷佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

  In the fall, my grandfather's family notonly milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.

  5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语。

  例如:My grandfather didn't have time tostand around doing nothing with his school friends.

  Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:

  My grandfather didn't have time toloiter with his school friends.

  6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达。

  例如:Profits from the farm were not times they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They werenot sufficient to pay for a university degree.

  两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:

  Profits from the farm were sometimes toosmall to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree.

  小作文写作技巧

  1. 雅思小作文写作结构搭建:

  (1) 第一段的introduction:直接改写题目——句型主动改被动或是反之,单词可做稍微替换,虽然说改写比较简单,但是这一步骤缺一不可。一定要改写题目,一定不能照抄。

  (2) 第二段的overview:图表中,你最先看到的,最最明显的特征,你这里可以做以下稍微的总结,因为怕你后面没时间进行总结,小作文的时间最多只有20分钟,要放在大作文后面写,很多时候大作文会占据大于40分钟的时间,那么你的小作文时间就会来不及,那么在这里你对于最最明显的特征进行总结,就算到后面没时间,也不会因为没有对图表特征进行总结而扣分。

  (3) 第三段的details:图表所提供的信息就是需要你进行对比的。对比分两种:纵向和横向。纵向是跟自己比,比之前自己增长了,还是下降了;横向比是跟别人比,跟比人比我是第一还是最后。图表中的数据信息,你无需所有的数据都写在你的文中里,只需要特征明显的,比如位于首位,位于最后这种,还有就是一定要进行对比。

  (4) 如果你前面的overview段有总结了,就无需再来个结尾段了,不过要是有时间,你也可以进行一句话的结尾。

  2. 雅思小作文素材积累

  这边给大家展示我自己所积累的小作文用到的素材。大家每天都拿出来看一遍,写小作文的时候尽量用上去。

  时期:from…to, between…and, over/ during the period from 1995 to 2005=over/during the period of one decade

  上升:go up, climb, grow, rise, increase, ascend, show an upward trend=show an increasing/rise trend

  表明/揭示:show/reveal/indicate/reflect/present/describe/illustrate/demonstrate/compare/give informationabout + n

  缓慢、逐渐:slow, slowly=gradually=steadily=consistently=step by step,contious

  迅速:rapid, quick, swift,sudden, sharp, dramatic

  小幅度:slight(ly), modest(ly), moderate(ly), marginal(ly)

  大幅度、明显:sharp,drastic, considerable, noticeable, marked, dramatic, significant, substantially,

  下降:fall, go down, drop, decrease, decline, descend, dip, dipped, show a downward trend, plummet, plunge

  波动:fluctuate, fluctuation,eg: rise with some fluctuation, go up and down=be  unstable/flexible=be in instability/flexibility

  保持平稳、不变:level out/off at + n=stabilize / hover at + n= reach a plateau at +  n

  Stay/keep/remain/maintain + stable/ unchanged/constant at+ n

  大约:about,around, almost, nearly, roughly, approximately, just over/under…,… or so

  达到最大值:reach the maximum=reach the peak/summit/culmination at + n=peak/summit/culminate at…=reach the highest point at

  达到最小值: reach the minimum=reach/touch the bottom at…=bottom out at…=reach the lowest point at…

  补充:according to = in accordance with= based in= in terms of =in the light of = in line with

  Comparing…=compared with/to…=in comparison with…= different from…

  While, whilst, whereas, yet

  To conclude, in conclusion=to summarize, in summary=to sum up=all in all =overall

  3. 雅思小作文写作训练

  小作文就最适合这种模式性的训练啦。有了上面的框架,还有就是积累各种说明文的上升下降,巨变啥的表达。去找那些老师们整理好的资源呗,不用自己准备了,你要做的就是直接拿来用。这是站在巨人肩膀上,哈哈。

  我用的是9分达人的那个母题训练,在清楚写作骨骼的前提下,再来补充血肉和灵魂,哈哈。然后积累范文里面的好句子。有了骨架,写作材料就是血和肉,你的主题思想就是写作思路就是你整篇文章的灵魂,三者缺一不可。

  一定要练习哈!三天就可以来一次训练了,我很庆幸找到了一个一起奋斗的小烤鸭,我们互相监督,互相批改,严格的时间内完成,然后两个人进行讨论修改,再写,再改,就是这么一路走过来的。也不要套模板吧,就是明白了写作模式,有了框架,再加上题目的写作思路,有了灵魂,再加上你的词句,有了血肉,其实就是你自己的模板。这个时候你的小伙伴是很重要的,大家一起高歌欢唱,才会让自己走得更远。

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